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But you forget, Sekai Project aren't actually making the projects, indie companies are. These VN's would be up there regardless of if Sekai project was involved or not, all their doing is helping them get to a bigger market and investing a little into each project.

Confession: I'm actually a huge yaoi fangirl

Well.... that sound effect certainly does it's job... O.o

^ In most cases yes, but the problem was, the crit wasn't really to relevant in this particular case due to the circumstances behind it (aka, I know how to make realistic, believable characters with good interactions, I pride myself on this part of my writing, it just wasn't so in this case that I literally couldn't do what I normally do, thus, what I ended up with was something that isn't as good as I normally produce) (apart from the senses bit, thanks for that) and that isn't your fault, it's mine for not saying before hand the circumstances in which this was written.

Juniper's Knot had really nice GUI

Thanks for the feedback! It actually is super helpful Mind if I address some of the issues? "Aside from that, it's a little difficult to read due to the format, and the descriptions are kind of weak. While the narration gets the protagonist's voice across to an adequate degree, it's coupled with descriptions that neither convey the scene as a whole or pull a vivid sense of a single thing. I realize that you might be grabbing heavily from art in this sense, and it's usually a benefit, though the art can only convey things in a visual sense. Focus on other senses as well - sound, smell etc, and see if you can improve on that." Actually, I hadn't though of any of the other senses, and I'm actually really glad you pointed them out. I agree, my descriptions are weak (at least, in vn's they tend to be, oddly enough, I have the opposite problem in prose writing, heavy detailed descriptions, terrible dialogue), and could defo use some work in terms of vn's at least. "characters themselves don't feel very strong" I also forgot to mention that these character's aren't actually mine, and at the time of writing the draft, only had a basic character portfolio that I was trying to follow, so the reason for this issue is more to do with my *ahem* fear? of stepping on the original creators toes and the other writers toes by giving them additional characterises ect ect I know I sound like I'm making excuses, but anyone in my shoes will know what I'm talking about when it comes to writing a basic character which hasn't been fully developed yet and having to do it with other writers. "conflict/character arc" That's because there isn't one, I was literally just told to write a 'light-hearted' scene. I really should say what the aim of my writing were before I post for crit huh XD

26th October, and the only one I know is Austria out of Hetalia

No, I'm actually helping (or at least trying to)

Haha no worries, you don't owe me a thing, I should be thanking you for taking the time

I feel for Ian, even the Italian's are using the wrong letter at the start (it was meant to be a L, she was meant to be called Lan XD) On a side note: congrats, more exposure!

False, never bothered with it Next person, you know what the 5 layers of the epidermis are (sorry, busy revision mode)

Confession 1: I really should be revising rather than looking at the confessions thread Confession 2: I really should be revising rather than roleplaying hetalia stuff

Might try for Bioshock, always wanted to try it. At least I've tried BorderLands 2 (and totally sucked but oh well)

You guys are mean ;~; Not all of us can afford Xbox's and PS3's ect or a decent computer to play games on ;~;

Confession 1: I love the fallout games Confession 2: I've never actually played a fallout game

It's okay, it happens (to me more often than most it seems, which is why I seemed a little miffed before, sorry about that). And that's good to know I might take a look at a let's play before I actually buy but hopefully it should be something I enjoy (I usually do enjoy sci-fi anyway)

Love how my question has been completely ignored but ah well, I'm sure I'll see if it's gotten any better or not at some point

Yin by Mirrowdothack http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewtopic.php?f=45&t=25320

Never played a vn with a partner before (have watched lots of anime with them though), but I'd love to try it some time.