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I haven't heard of any groups taking direct requests, but if you have a suggestion to make as to a game you think is good and that will be popular, I don't see anything wrong with just asking publicly here in the forum to see what the level of interest is like. Someone may know of a group that's searching for a good new project.

20 years ago I spent so many hours playing and replaying the original X-COM that I had nightmares about chryssalids. Then recently I spent another few weeks playing Enemy Unknown. If this game is anywhere near as good as its predecessors, I'll be playing it as well.

"You mean i should describer their apearance?"
 
No, I didn't necessarily mean that you need to describe the characters more. I meant that because the reader has no visual references, we need more time with each character in order to solidly differentiate them in our minds.
 
 
"Im event hinking about not writing chapters on his POV because i want te reader to try to understan d his way of thinking without "reading" his mind, a sort of way fo constructing characters by drawing a "silhoutte" of him from the outside.
 
What do you think."
 
I think it's an interesting concept. It certainly will test your writing and the reader's imagination more if the "main" character is never a narrative/perspective character. I can't say whether it's right or wrong for your story since it will all come down to your execution. I do like the idea that you want to avoid "telling" the story directly through the character's thoughts. That will encourage you to "show" more of his actions from the perspectives of those around him.
 
 
"i might have to use a different plataform of posting it, forums aren´t speacially suited for longer fiction, do you have suggestions?"
 
I personally have published some work on Wattpad, which is currently the world's largest site for posting free fiction and getting readers and feedback. Fair warning that if you request criticism there, it may be harsh, but there's a huge and active community. I'll post the link to the Wattpad page of one of my works.
 
https://www.wattpad.com/story/6563621-no-life-to-lose
 
There's a forum there specifically for people to offer or receive help with their writing as well:
 
https://www.wattpad.com/club/27-improve-your-writing

Not related to the thread, but your avatar made me think for a second about the topic. I think derpina is highly likely to commit NTR without even realizing.
 
Carry on.

Alright, new chapter i just wrote, i tried my best to be slower now.

Enjoy.

"Chapter 1 – The Governor

Saladin-Class Supercarrier "Wrath of God", near planet Sahyr.

Mahmoud was irritated, there was was, a man who dedicated 12 years of his life to the study of planetary admnistration and business, the first of his class even, what he got as reward? A backwater planet at the border of the Sultanate territory, inhabited by a primitive pre-space alien civilization, brilliant.

The planet itself was beaultiful, verdant and seemingly temperate, quite similar to Earth, if Earth wasn´t the charred wasteland it is today, Mahmoud tried to imagine why the Sultan permitted them to have the planet, even as slaves, surely it had great deposits of strategic resources the Sultanate desperately need, but no, they chose to transform the entire planet into a giant university dedicated to slave intelectuals and thinkers of all kinds, no infraestructure to speak of, no great cities...basicaly a rural planet, the wet dream of anhy industrialist, if the planet wasn´t protected by laws made centuries ago. While lost in thought, Mahmoud didn´t noticed a presence besides who, who now speaks ina very feminine, yet alien, voice.
 
"Baultiful isn´t it? You know every Sahhossi has a 4k photo of the planet so they can remember to have faith in the future?"
 
He saw a Sahhosi woman, one of the pretty ones too, redhead, of heatly complexion and a bright green skin, Mamoud aways imagined that if they were mammalians (kinda) and had breasts, he imagined what kind of sex organ they had, of course he knew from anatomy photos that they have a similar biology to humans, not equal, of course, but one thing was to look at photos, another was to see real life. Of course he woudn´t, because he was married with children back in Ghassid IV. Mariah was his secretary and councillor in Sahyr issues, she would be of great help to him.
 
"Hello Mariah, what do you want?"

"To inform you that your atmospheric transport is ready for you at your leisure."
 
"Oh of course..."

He then leave his chair and begin to walk towards the exit of the room, then suddenly stops and look at Mariah.

"That thing about a photo of the planet, even the starborn have them?"

Mariah laughed, like it was a obvious question.
 
"Specially the starborn, sir."

He then looked at the planet, it was indeed a beaultiful planet, untouched by greed, then he looks at the woman, and says.

"what are you waiting for? Come with me, i have questions."

She smiled.

"Certainly sir.

A few minutes later they were confortably sit inside the egg-shapped transport, it was small and economic in design, like most sahhosi designs, minimalist outside, but complex inside. They both were sitted one in front of the other, so close he could almost smell her breath, his face was getting red.
 
"Are you alright sire? Its too hot here? I can go in the next transport if need be."

"No! No!, its nothing, i am ok, just nervous."

"Oh, that´s alright sir, you will do fine."
 
"You think?"

"Of course, i know you 1 year now, you are a good, if flawed man, im interested to know how you wil..."

Her speech wa sinterrupted by a rambling, there was no windows in the atmospheric transport, it was designed as a shuttle more than a ship, there was no propulsion systems, they were shot like a bullet into the planet at a certain angle then allowed for both survivability for the reentrance and air-breaking, allowing for a smooth, fast travel. The target was a plataform where a kinetic dampener would absorb the impact of the shuttle without damaging it.

"As i was speaking, sir, im curious to see how you will deal with Sahyr problems, will you use brute force? Diplomacy?"

"I´d prefer a smooth, peaceful government,i wasn´t democratically ellected, but now i feel responsible for this planet, i want to be the best governor this planet ever had. Say, Mariah, what do you think i shnould do about slavery?"

"Oooh, touchy issue huh? As starborn, i was never slaved, but you might not want to hear what i have to say about it, anyway."

"Don´t worry, this is not a test neither i am not recording this conversation, as you may very well know, this capsule doesn´t allow for electronics to function during operation so they doesn´t interfere with navigational systems, so i couldn´t even if i wanted, i just want to...hear your opinion on the matter."

"I think you should abolish it, its immoral and abhorrent to enslave anyone, this is my opinion, but i know you don´t have the power to do it, so i´d say, let the population know your feelings on the matter beforehand, just know you could create more rebels than allies if you say you like slavery."
 
"I...don´t know really, slavery is as old as mankind, it feels unnatural to think of a world without it now. I even supported it in the past, before reading one of Sayid Osman´s books on the issue "Philosophical Consideration of Slavery", im not entirely convinced its a bad thing, but it gave me food for thought."

Mariah once again smile, she lived her entire life as a reprocessing speacialist in the EMF, short for Exiled Mineration Fleet, or simply, Exiled Fleet, before deciding she wanted more of her life than merely looking at how good she could make her alloys, or how pure their minerium was, so she enroled at one of Sichassi universities, and graduated first of her class on Philosophy and Antropology, then she candidated herself when Mahmoud offered jobs for exilates to serve as councillors, something that only feeded his reputationa s a liberal-minded man.

"You guys at the EMF surely are firm about your beliefs uh?"

"We wouldnt be one of the biggest sources of primary commodities if we were lax in our ideology, all we do is, as you know, to reclaim the Homeworld."

"I dont´t knwo if i should send you to prison right now or if a kill you..."

Silence. Then laughter, they both knew he wouldn´t
 
"hehehe, very funny sir, You heard me talking about the EMF before, if you wanted me imprionedi would be months ago."

"You know it..."

Then suddenly their conversation was interrupted as the door of the shuttle opened, the´ve reached the surface and didn´t even feel a thing, what marvels of technology those dampeners were.
 
"How do you feel about being the first starborn Sahhosi to walk into your Homeworld?"

She was actually crying, Mahmoud was expecting some emotions, yes, but actual crying? The cold, calculating starborn, crying? There was a first for everything uh...

"A...are you alright?"

He placed a hand or her should, the entire reception team organized by the locals looked at her as if they knew what she was feeling. Then she stopped, and recomposed herself.
"Im sorry, i will talk later, let just...see them, okay?"

Mahmoud was shocked at the speed she transitioned between crying and composure, this sure was a strange person. Then some dignataries aproched them at the kinetic dampener plataform just as they were taking their luggage off. The dignataries were composed mostly of Sahhosi, but escorted by some humans. An elder stepped in and said, making an exagerated bow.

"Welcome to our humble planet, governor, i hope you bring us the hope we need in those dark times."

"Let us talk ab out hope and dark times in another time, Elder, now i need to find my home so i can rest, by tomorrow i want a complete report on the planet, including politics, rebelions, geology, geography and the such. Okay?"

"Indeed sir, we will have everything for you tomorrow."
 
Then the elder looked at Mariah, with a smile.
"It is an honour to receive a representant of our starborn brothers, you are the evry first of your kind to visit Sahyr since...the conquest?"

Mariah seemed as if she was going to cry again, but maintained her composure and smiled back.
 
"Its my honour to be received back into Homeworld."

"OK, enough with the introductions, Mariah, do you want me to escort you to your home?"

She shakes he head.
 
"No need sir, i will find my own way around, i want to...explore this place, there´s so much to learn."

"I understand, be safe, okay?"

Damn, he was letting his passion to take control of him, truth was, Mahmoud wa sinfartuated witht he Sahhosi woman, he still loved his family, but the burnning passion of love was reserved only to this girl, and there was time he almost declared himself, but never did, he still had a family he was responsible to, but he hoped, deep in his mind, one day he would be able to say this to her.

And so, he let her go."
 

I'm interested in how the art style of the sprites is closer to realistic than to a traditional anime style. The detail work in the BG is nice as well, with the light through the windows and the patterns on the tiles.
 
Keep up the good work.

I don't really consider whether a VN has sexual content or not when deciding whether to play it. I will give anything a try if it has half-decent reviews/reputation or if it looks interesting to me personally. I consider the sex aspect to be like in real life: sex happens. It's not that strange. It's also not at all necessary to telling a good story, so it's fine either way.

I don't really consider whether a VN has sexual content or not when deciding whether to play it. I will give anything a try if it has half-decent reviews/reputation or if it looks interesting to me personally. I consider the sex aspect to be like in real life: sex happens. It's not that strange. It's also not at all necessary to telling a good story, so it's fine either way.

I'm surprised how many people are so keyed in on whether they include the sexual content or not.
 
I personally think Muv-Luv is amazing, but of everything in it, the adult content is by far the least relevant. It's not even particularly well done compared to the caliber of the rest of the content. With G-senjou for example, I don't think you'd have the same product if you took out the adult portion. Muv-Luv might actually be better without it.

I don't really consider whether a VN has sexual content or not when deciding whether to play it. I will give anything a try if it has half-decent reviews/reputation or if it looks interesting to me personally. I consider the sex aspect to be like in real life: sex happens. It's not that strange. It's also not at all necessary to telling a good story, so it's fine either way.

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Well, it's my turn for doing the developer's corner, so... yeah, it's going to be about the art obviously.

Not much of a secret, but just a couple of sped up process videos of me drawing a character from Violet Hill:

Sketching/Lining: https://youtu.be/iNs0zH2D9xo
Colouring: https://youtu.be/PEgm9fIcsoA

(Forgive the quality of the colouring one, messed up the compression orz)
 
Cheers!
 
 
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If this is an art project and not a marketing project, isn't the important part your artwork?
 
If the main focus is the marketing aspect, that's something completely different.

Nice sketch vid. It's interesting how often you flip the image back and forth while working on the sketch. Is that common practice for artists?

Do you like playing Visual Novels?  Well, of course you do, that's why you're here in the first place! Do you like to discuss the Visual Novels you play?  Well, I'm assuming you do, since this is a forum where we do exactly that. Would you like to continue doing exactly what you're doing, just in a more..."official-like" environment? Hey everybody!  I'm Ryechu, resident pervert, editor of porn, and as of recently, the new spokesperson for FuwaReviews! We are looking for additional full-time members for FuwaReviews, as well as part-time contributors via our revamped Community-Submitted Review program!
We are seeking a couple full-time reviewers - these individuals will have access to our super-secret Review Team Hideout.  These reviews have a few more requirements than Community Submitted ones, so if you're not interested in doing a lot of reviews, then you might be interested in the Community section.  For those who want the details on this, click the spoiler:  
 
We are also reintroducing Community-Submitted reviews, but I will be handling this much more strictly than our previous iteration.  If you'd like to submit a single a review, or just a review once in a while, this is the spoiler you want to click:
 

  Finally, we are seeking somebody very familiar with Wordpress that can help us redesign the site.  We want something that is sleek, stylistic, and matches our other requirements.  Get in touch with us via PM if you're interested in helping us with this as well.   Thank you for taking the time to look through this, and if this is something that interests you, let's work together!   ~Ryechu

I've had this idea for a sort of anime recommendations master list for a while now, but I was never sure how to go about making it. I'll try to explain me idea the best I can, and you guys can tell me if it seems like something we should do.

The idea is to make a master list of titles recommended by the citizens of the Fuwanovel forums, sorted into categories, complete with descriptions and other information, links, and personal comments. It would be meant to serve as a place to start when you are looking for something to watch. Anybody could reply to the thread with the information for a recommendation to be added to the list. They wouldn't necessarily need to include things like description or pictures, I can do that. Title, category, and optional comments would be enough.

In order to eliminate duplicate listings, each show would have to be limited to the single closest existing category. So if a series is Action and Psychological, it can only go under one category, not both. Otherwise we would end up with the same show being listed under several separate categories.

I was hoping to include pictures in the information section of each show, since how a show looks can play a bit part in whether the individual is going to watch it. But we would hit the image limit too quick, and I'm not sure if there's a way to get around that.
 
Here is a small example of what it could look like:
 
Comedy

Action

• Trigun



Romance

Sci-Fi

Drama
 
Sports
 
• Free!



 
 
Thoughts?

Do you remember your last week of high school?
Do you remember the feeling of equal parts excitement and melancholy, as you knew your high school student days were coming to an end?
How about the nostalgia that ran through your body, as you knew you’d be saying goodbye to a place that had so many memories for you?
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Last Days of Spring is a YA (Young Adult) Otome Visual Novel following a group of high school seniors in their last week of school as they come to terms with questions about love, life and destiny. Follow the steps of Yuka Kishimoto as she navigates across her final week as a high school student and sees her life come to a complete change!

With a wistful and flowing narrative mixed with soothing music and a tasteful art-style this Visual Novel will bring you to a time when everything and nothing mattered. A time when you felt there was so much to explore but also so much to miss. Immerse yourself in this touching and sweet tale and decide how you would re-live your “Last Days of Spring”.
This Visual Novel can best be described as mixing the enchanting and light aesthetic of works like “Whisper of the Heart” and “Cardcaptor Sakura” with the contemporary Young Adult-focused narrative of authors like John Green (Paper Towns and Looking for Alaska).
Game Features:
 
Japanese setting but using Native English vernacular and vocabulary. Deep and immersive story with charming and realistic characters. High quality original and unique artwork. Original Pop and Ambient Music Five different endings.  
Android Version
WINDOWS AND MAC ON 


 
 
Contacts:
Website ► SapphireDragonProductions.com
Facebook page ► Facebook.com
Twitter page ► Twitter.com 
Dev Blog ► Blog.SapphireDragonProductions.com

I love the originality of becoming Mother Nature. That's actually I concept I've never heard of before. It seems like the popularity of Otome as a genre is growing a lot recently, so hopefully you can capitalize on that ... although you didn't mention that word anywhere, so maybe to you this isn't an Otome game at all. Do you feel that would be a misclassification on my part?
 
Anyway, good luck! Seems like an interesting project.

The art style looks pretty unique, and just the use of the word "vernacular" makes me believe that the phrase "Japanese setting but using Native English vernacular and vocabulary" is true. Although Otome isn't my genre, this seems interesting. Good luck!

Hi everyone,
 
I've been learning Japanese and translating this one visual novel for several years now. My progress is very slow, but I feel like every day I can make some headway toward my goals. I'd like to become a part of this community, if you're willing to take me in.
 
The VN I'm working on is Musumaker: https://vndb.org/v1160
 
It's a loli game that's very comedic and light-hearted, but also has erotic S&M content and dark themes later on that I haven't reached yet. I even completed a 15% translation patch for it (sorry if it's amateurish), with some help from a programmer over on Hongfire.
 
I'm wondering whether this game will be acceptable to this community, seeing as it seems to get hated on. Last year, I tried to introduce it to TL-wiki and to be put on an ongoing translations list on 4chan, but it was a bad experience for me. I'm pretty sensitive, and I don't feel comfortable with approaching those places anymore.
 
If you don't want to put it on your ongoing translations news list, I don't mind. I just wanted to introduce myself, and be able to be a part of the forum. The people on Hongfire are very kind, but I think I'm the only one working on a translation for an actual VN there -- they're mostly busy with mods of 3D games, I think.
 
Yoroshiku onegaishimasu!

I'm on a couple of facebook groups aimed at otome games.  I know these games as usually aimed for the younger crowd, but you see so many older fans playing visual novels.  At first when I started playing them I felt a little weird since I didn't think many around my age were into them.  Luckily, this isn't the case and I made a lot of new friends.  On the business end, I saw more people around my age wanting to make these games than younger people, at least that was my experience when I was searching for people to team up with me.

Thank you and welcome to the forums, too.